Draft #1
Prompt Hero
Form Ballad
Device Epistrophe Anaphorism

He dyed his locks blue black
He dyed his nails blue black
He dyed his eyelids blue black
As if that would bring her back

He died at night crying
He died at night from lying
He died at night from trying
to dream her back again

He pierced and pierced what could be pierced
until he ran out of room
Ear, lip, brow, nose and tongue
the pain would never bring her back

Hide his eyes with contacts grey on white
Hide his eyes never show them in real life
Hide his pain behind a cloud of guilt
hoping it would bring her back.
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Good enough for a rock salad
but not a good ballad.
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Draft #2
Prompt Hero
Form Ballad
Device Epistrophe Anaphorism

He dyed his locks blue black
He died at night crying
Hid his eyes with contacts grey on white
As if that would bring her back

He dyed his nails blue black
He died at night from lying
Hid his true eyes from real life
to dream her back again

He dyed his eyelids blue black
He died at night from trying
Hid his pain behind a cloud of guilt
hoping it would bring her back.

He pierced and pierced what could be pierced
until he ran out of room
Lip, brow, nose, tongue and ear
the pain would never bring her back

Don’t you have a joy my boy
to bring your smile back?
The hope that its return
will bring your mother back
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Good enough for a big hair rock ballad
from maybe 1981, probably not.
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Draft #3
Prompt Hero
Form Ballad
Device Epistrophe Anaphorism

A young boy, worshiped his father,
did evil in his name
and that can be forgiven

He was used as a tool
cause he was the fool
but that should be forgiven.

He committed a crime
but with served time
that has been forgiven.

He hated her
because his father did
but that can be forgiven.

He tried to replace her
to please his sire
but that should be forgiven.

He caused strife in his house
to gain a love
and that has been forgiven

He betrayed his brothers
to prove his love
but that can be forgiven.

He frightened all
within the home
but that should be forgiven.

He attempted self harm
from loathing himself
but that has been forgiven

He sabotaged
each year of his life
but that can be forgiven.

He pulled his gifts
away from everyone
but that has been forgiven.

He learned to make beauty
in spite of everything
in order to forgive himself

He can be forgiven
He should be forgiven
He has been forgiven
He learns to forgive himself

He became a young man who worshiped his father
did evil in his name and that has been forgiven
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Doesn’t an epic hero have at least 25 flaws all that are forgiven,
has to complete a journey and fail so he can be forgiven
be assisted by an unseen deity in order to succeed in order to forgive himself?
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2 thoughts on “Writing 201 Prompt Hero Form Ballad Device Epistophe or Anaphorism Draft 1, 2 and 3

  1. Epic heroes can be helped by deities or else by “magical helpers”. I am thinking of all of the fairy tales where it is the youngest prince, the slothly slovenly failure, who takes the time to help a mouse, an old lady, a bug, and then it is these helpers that save him in turn, by performing the “impossible task” or telling him a secret. Jail could be a magical helper of a sort, a hard lesson. I like the drafts.

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