Please let me know which version seems better to you?
 
Version1
I never thought this rejection

would add to my depression

My boys just bit me when

they had had enough.

 

My daughter just prefers

food she can chew.

She never bit me

like the boys.

 

Petunia wants texture in

cubes, slices and chunks.

I should feel relieved

that my last one

has been the kindest.

 

We share fruit during

breakfast lunch and dinner prep

no more liquid meals in bed followed by our nap

during which l examine her hair, nails, skin and face.

 

It all went by too fast.

I’m the one with attachment issues

I did it to myself.

 

I raised one who will be a force

silent, smiling, crowing

this girl is power

she glows!

Version 2
I never thought this rejection would add to my depression.
 
My boys just bit me when they had had enough. My daughter just prefers food she can chew. She never bit me like the boys did

 

Petunia wants texture in cubes, slices and chunks. I should feel relieved that my last one has been the kindest.

 

We share fruit during breakfast lunch and dinner prep. No more liquid meals in bed followed by our nap, during which, l examine her hair, nails, skin and face.

 

It all went by too fast. I’m the one with attachment issues, I did it to myself.

 

I raised one who will be a force. Silent, smiling, crowing this girl is power, she glows!

Any thoughts on the above post are appreciated! Otherwise, I think I must be living under a rock.

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