Please let me know which version seems better to you?
Version1
I never thought this rejection
would add to my depression
My boys just bit me when
they had had enough.
My daughter just prefers
food she can chew.
She never bit me
like the boys.
Petunia wants texture in
cubes, slices and chunks.
I should feel relieved
that my last one
has been the kindest.
We share fruit during
breakfast lunch and dinner prep
no more liquid meals in bed followed by our nap
during which l examine her hair, nails, skin and face.
It all went by too fast.
I’m the one with attachment issues
I did it to myself.
I raised one who will be a force
silent, smiling, crowing
this girl is power
she glows!
Version 2
I never thought this rejection would add to my depression.
My boys just bit me when they had had enough. My daughter just prefers food she can chew. She never bit me like the boys did
Petunia wants texture in cubes, slices and chunks. I should feel relieved that my last one has been the kindest.
We share fruit during breakfast lunch and dinner prep. No more liquid meals in bed followed by our nap, during which, l examine her hair, nails, skin and face.
It all went by too fast. I’m the one with attachment issues, I did it to myself.
I raised one who will be a force. Silent, smiling, crowing this girl is power, she glows!
Amanuensis Sobriquet-Reverie 